Kia ora! I am a Year 6 student in Room 5 at Ahipara School, in the Far North of New Zealand. My teacher is Ms Peters. This is where I share my learning. Please leave a positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.
Kia ora Michael, I really liked your deconstructed recount and the way you used Show, Don't tell to describe your holiday. You made me laugh reading about your cousin's 'interesting smells'. Maybe next time you could work on proofreading, punctuation and paragraphs. Keep up the good effort! Blog ya later, Ms Peters.
Hello Micheal it´s Nike here. I really liked your blog post.Maybe next time you could put more to read and proof read it.Keep up the great work! Blog ya later,Nike
Kia ora Michael, I really liked your deconstructed recount and the way you used Show, Don't tell to describe your holiday. You made me laugh reading about your cousin's 'interesting smells'. Maybe next time you could work on proofreading, punctuation and paragraphs. Keep up the good effort! Blog ya later, Ms Peters.
ReplyDeleteHello Micheal it´s Nike here. I really liked your blog post.Maybe next time you could put more to read and proof read it.Keep up the great work! Blog ya later,Nike
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